M Stands for Manipulation

I changed several things in my paper starting with my attention grabber. I changed the whole sentence into something more attractive to my readers. I thought my attention grabber was to boring. I changed the extra space I had in my paper which I didn’t know how to until now. I changed a few words that I mistakenly added instead of the right word. I also changed the sentences from my second paragraph. I excluded using first person “us” since it is informal to use when writing college essays. I deleted the last sentences from my second paragraph which didn’t make sense and added something that did make sense with my paragraph. I had a run on sentence which I made them into two separate sentences. In my third paragraph I explained my first sentence which was a good idea I wrote. I would like feedback on the mistakes I corrected and anything else would be great to know. M Stands for Manipulation Manipulation is so convenient for the fast food industry. Eric Schlosser gives examples of how manipulation is not a positive thing towards young children and adults. After examining the theme of manipulation in Fast Food Nation, it became clear to me that the fast food industry is in business solely for their own good because of how they manipulate enticing child customers, low wage workers, and marketers want you to trust them. Children were the target to manipulate fast food for Kroc. “A child who loves our TV commercials, ’Kroc explained,’ and brings her grandparents to a McDonald’s gives us two more customers (qtd. Schlosser 41). He knew well how to manipulate young children and also the parents because they are the ones who take the children and pay for the meal. If they advertise a new toy for the ‘Happy Meals’ they knew there would be a lot of kid customers coming in. Marketers knew if there were a lot more new toys being advertising they would profit plenty of money. The low wage