After Meeting With Mrs. Johnson Thesis Statement

After both conferences, write a short, reflective piece that describes: What did you revise specifically? - How did these specific revisions make the end product better? - If you chose to ignore some feedback, why did you do so?
After meeting with Mrs. Johnson, I had to review over the suggestions and reflect about the feedback I received. For the most part, I followed the suggestions. The things that I revised specifically was simple grammar errors and showing progression of the characters and conflict, which needed to connect to the thesis statement. In the case of the simple grammar errors, there was part of a sentence that did not make sense, “...how any individual would be lost, attempting to discover their own sense of happiness.” This part of the sentence did not make
sense, thus to make the point more clear I took this part out and added “how any individual lacks happiness.” In the case of showing progression of the characters and conflict, some of my quotes did not show how the protagonist changed their belief throughout the story.
Therefore, I went back through my novel and found quotes that showed this progression. This, in turn, helped me to have strong examples to prove the thesis statement. These specific revisions made the end product better because before meeting with Mrs. Johnson I had three, relevant quotes chosen in an attempt to prove the thesis statement. However, after meeting with Mrs. Johnson, the quotes chosen represent a holistic view of the novel and were strong examples to prove the thesis statement. As a result, the overall essay and grading contract level improved immensely. Even though I followed almost all of my feedback, there was one piece of feedback that I chose to ignore. Mrs. Johnson questioned one of my three quotes that illustrated the setting, in relation to the thesis statement. This quote, in Mrs. Johnson’s opinion, was strong, but she wanted to make sure this was the best quote. I knew that this was the best quote because it connected to the thesis statement and illustrated the point being made quite well. In addition, by receiving this feedback,
I decided to add more clear information in the warrant, therefore removing any possible question about this quote. Overall, having a conference with Mrs. Johnson allowed me to improve my essay, helping me to reach my desired grade.

After both conferences, write a short, reflective piece that describes: What did you revise specifically? - How did these specific revisions make the end product better? - If you chose to ignore some feedback, why did you do so?
After meeting with Junior Lexi Kaltenberg, I had to review over the suggestions and reflect about the feedback I received. For the most part, I followed the suggestions. The things that I revised specifically was simple grammar errors. In the case of the simple grammar errors, there was multiple areas where I could change around the wording or using a synonym for certain words. For example, in the introduction there was an issue with singular versus plural and wording confusion, “in an environment where individuals alway suffer from choices they made, certain characteristics become eliminated.” This part of the sentence did not make sense, thus to make the point more clear I corrected the plural versus singular and wording confusion, “in an environment where individuals always suffer from their actions, certain characteristics become eliminated.” This, in turn, helped me to demonstrate sound knowledge of writing conventions. These specific revisions made the end product better because before meeting with Lexi Kaltenberg I had all right grammar and all right conventions. However, after meeting with Lexi Kaltenberg, the essay demonstrated sound knowledge of writing conventions. As a result, the overall essay and grading contract level improved immensely. Even though I followed almost all of my feedback, there was one piece of feedback that I chose to ignore. Lexi Kaltenberg recommended that I change the format of my essay. The format, in Lexi Kaltenberg’s opinion, was incorrect. I knew that this was the correct format because Mrs. Johnson said that having the essay in font Arial and font size eleven or twelve was just fine. In addition, by receiving this feedback, I decided to check past essays and double check, therefore removing any possible question about the format of the essay. Overall, having a conference with Lexi Kaltenberg allowed me to improve my essay, helping me to reach my desired grade.