What I think would of enhanced Fantasy Football for Dummies by a Dummy, would of been more of a description of other characters in his league. He mentions other people in his league but nothing really about them. If he would of included a more detailed description of the fantasy football league,
When he mentions the league in the second paragraph, that would of been a nice addition of a description to grasp the reader's attention
more. He does have a nice description in the beginning of the paper but it dies by the second paragraph and if he would add more senses and dialogue he had with some league players, the paper would of been more attention-grabbing.