How a Dog’s Organism Evolves and Becomes Suited to Its Environment? Although there are many types of organisms that could have been chosen [The passive voice is a form of "be" (have been) and a participle (chosen). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Try to use the active voice most often; for example, passive voice = The paper was completed on time. Active voice = the student completed the paper on time--See Center for Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] for this assignment, such as snakes, starfish, frogs, plants, cats, and many others, but dogs were chosen [Passive voice ] for this assignment. Even as time has passed, dogs are still evolving and are still suitable to their environment. In a dog, it has individual cells that are [Suggestion: see if the sentence can be rewritten to remove "that are"] grouped [Passive voice ] into tissues, which then are grouped [Passive voice ] into organs, which all work in the organ system. All of these put together [Clearer writing suggestion--"put together" means simply "assemble" or "assembled"] making up a dog’s body that at level of the hierarchy act together [Cliché: "get the act together" is an over-used phrase that marks you as unoriginal. Use another description] to perform the functions of life, such as regulating the dog’s [Apostrophe: remove if the word is not possessive] internal environment. All of these parts allow the dog’s organs to still evolve and become suited to its environment today. As humans breathe, eat, urinate, sweat, and radiate heat, dogs do the same because that
Citations: reference page follow guidelines ydes, but much not cite * Properly cites ideas/info from other sources Not enough * Paper is laid out effectively--uses, heading and other reader-friendly tools mostly * Paper is neat/shows attention to detail NeatGrammar/Punctuation/Spelling--10% * Rules of grammar, usage, punctuation are followed needs work * Spelling is correct no misspellsReadability/Style--10% * Sentences are complete, clear, and concise Difficult to understand, too long, too many different subjects * Sentences are well-constructed with consistently strong, varied structure needs work * Transitions between sentences/paragraphs/sections help maintain the flow of thought ok * Words used are precise and unambiguous needs work * The tone is appropriate to the audience, content, and assignment good | 2 of 4 pts. | 15 of 20 pts. You have to overall structure of a paper down, but you need to work on several things, word usage and sentence structure. You also do not have a clear idea of adaptation and evolution.