Veracles Review

Review of Veracles
Veracles was a very creative and insightful paper. I loved how it took place in the future, instead of the past or just nowadays. I really think that will help set your paper apart from the others. You did a great job of letting the reader know what questions were going to be asked, butI just have a few remarks about the layout of the questions.
First of all, it was straightforward on the second page what questions were going to be addressed in this paper, but you have the question, “What does it mean to you personally in relation to your students.” I think that is a great question to tie in a story instead of just have a boring discussion, but I am confused as to if you really answered that question. On the fourth page, Veracles makes the comment about the intentions of teaching, and I think that might be the answer to the question that I was confused about, but if it is, I would make it more clear.
Second of all, I think it was smart when you laid out the questions on the second page, but it seems to get a little lengthy, and by the time Veracles responds, it
I would shorten some of them up so you don’t confuse your reader. At the end of your intro, you leave the reader thinking that Vercales isn’t going to get definite answers, but in your conclusion they seem pretty definite from what Dr. Tyson says. If you want to continue your plan that you had in the beginning, I would show that Veracles is a little more uneasy with Dr. Tyson’s responses, or you could just tweak the intro to show that she is gaining more knowledge that what you had initially said she was going to obtain. Also, at the very ending, I felt like I was kind of hanging from Veracles point of view. Dr. Tyson had this beautiful remark, and then you hear nothing else from Veracles. I would possibly add something to make it more