Week 7 Peer Review Checklist Iambert To Angela Garcia Ascencio
Checklist for Course Project Peer Review
Use the checklist below as you conduct the Week 7 Peer Review.
Angela Garcia Ascencio / Your name: Della C Imbert
Name of Element:
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Comments or Suggestions for Improvement:
Does the paper clearly address a course theme? yes Does the paper contain the appropriate number of pages? yes Has the correct format been followed (spacing,font, layout)? yes Does the paper contain detailed, convincing language? Are ideas clear and concise? yes After reading the first two sentences I was very interested in reading the rest of this paper. I love that you added a personal account to it. It definitely captured my interests. I would however suggest you use the following sentence as part of your thesis since it embodies everything you are trying to say.” I was never taught about nutrition, nor limited on unhealthy foods, I have struggled with weight and health issues all of my life.” Maybe you can rephrase it but I think you hit the nail on the head with this sentence.
Is the amount of development appropriate to convince a reader to do or act differently? yes This paper is very well thought out. The sentences flow and the evidence to support your views are well documented. You are very persuasive with the information and it is clearly written in your own words. You are very thorough with the reasons or causes of obesity in children and the effect it can have on them as they get older.
Are you persuaded by the author’s argument; does it move you to think differently about the topic? yes You are very persuasive and document your arguments clearly. You clearly state the problems of obesity, the causes and the solutions to slow down this epidemic in young kids.
Are there citations for researched ideas, and are they correct? yes I like that you researched this paper and gave your opinions accordingly without using excessive citations.
Is the References page correctly formatted? yes Is the paper error-free regarding
Use the checklist below as you conduct the Week 7 Peer Review.
Angela Garcia Ascencio / Your name: Della C Imbert
Name of Element:
Yes:
No:
Comments or Suggestions for Improvement:
Does the paper clearly address a course theme? yes Does the paper contain the appropriate number of pages? yes Has the correct format been followed (spacing,font, layout)? yes Does the paper contain detailed, convincing language? Are ideas clear and concise? yes After reading the first two sentences I was very interested in reading the rest of this paper. I love that you added a personal account to it. It definitely captured my interests. I would however suggest you use the following sentence as part of your thesis since it embodies everything you are trying to say.” I was never taught about nutrition, nor limited on unhealthy foods, I have struggled with weight and health issues all of my life.” Maybe you can rephrase it but I think you hit the nail on the head with this sentence.
Is the amount of development appropriate to convince a reader to do or act differently? yes This paper is very well thought out. The sentences flow and the evidence to support your views are well documented. You are very persuasive with the information and it is clearly written in your own words. You are very thorough with the reasons or causes of obesity in children and the effect it can have on them as they get older.
Are you persuaded by the author’s argument; does it move you to think differently about the topic? yes You are very persuasive and document your arguments clearly. You clearly state the problems of obesity, the causes and the solutions to slow down this epidemic in young kids.
Are there citations for researched ideas, and are they correct? yes I like that you researched this paper and gave your opinions accordingly without using excessive citations.
Is the References page correctly formatted? yes Is the paper error-free regarding
References: page correctly formatted? yes Is the paper error-free regarding spelling, grammar, punctuation, and capitalization? no You should double check your grammar and punctuation. Are there any other suggestions for improving this paper? no