High School and Younger Sister

Hello my name is Dayo Akindele and I am interested in your school’s athletic department. I am 6’ 3” and weight 174 pounds. I have many different strengths in many different areas. First and foremost, I am a very hard worker. Whenever I do something I do it to the best of my ability and give it my all. I am extremely as seen through the dedication I have exerted through the years with the Heritage High School Track& Field and Basketball teams. Once I discovered that my true passion was track& field I completely devoted myself to the one program, while at the same time keeping up my grades in the classroom. I keep myself occupied running and jumping in this sport and I love it, but that is not my only motivation. My family is definitely one of the key aspects to my drive, discipline, and focus. I try to succeed and set a respectable example for my younger brother and younger sister. My brother was not the best with his behavior in school and out of school. This was mostly because he did not participate in any extracurricular activities. After seeing how occupied it kept me and the enjoyment it brought, he then joined the following year. Even my younger sister has taken notice of what track can offer an individual and has set her mind to become a track athlete as well. I hope that one day they both can be rewarded through this sport as I have. Leave out the fact that you have to have your mommy and daddy keep you in line with grades. No coach wants an athlete who has to be babied. Replace with two paragraphs. One about your SPECIFIC accomplishments in track and field. And second write a paragraph asking for information and thanking the school. Also, Check some of the changes I have made. Then send back.