What Makes Amanda Elaborate
Introduction – 45 to 60 seconds
Audio
Amanda’s mom made her prom dress exactly as she wanted it. She had asked for a black dress with silver sequins.
When her mom finished sewing it, it was a perfect fit. She wrote to her sister who was away at college to tell her all about it.
In the letter she wanted to highlight how pretty the sequin design was. So she elaborated on that one specific detail.
Sometimes when you write, you may need to highlight a few specific details.
The best way to elaborate on a specific detail is to further explain it by telling a story, using an illustration, or giving more examples.
Amanda elaborated as much as she could by giving examples.
She was hoping her sister would get a good idea of what the dress …show more content…
Elaborate on a specific detail when you wish to bring that item to the forefront, similar to shining a spotlight on it.
Build on Introduction – 25 to 35 seconds
Cara was standing off stage during the school assembly. She was waiting for her high school teacher to introduce her music recital solo.
Karen is a gifted pianist, and for her school’s 100th year anniversary she decided to play the school alma mater as a solo.
Not too many people know about Cara’s love for playing the piano, so her teacher decided to write a brief introduction to get the audience interested.
When you introduce something, you should offer just enough information to peak everyone’s interest.
Too much information in an introduction tends to spoil the experience.
Build on Clip B – 25 to 35 seconds
Audio
Cindy wishes to keep a detailed journal of her journey to a Native American Reservation.
She is visiting the reservation for the summer. Her parents told her that she may have some distant relatives still living in the area.
This is all new to Cindy and she wants to keep an accurate record of the food, culture, and the …show more content…
Leon explained how his mouth would be healthier if he brushed daily, regardless of what he ate. However, his brother was still a bit confused.
“Let me elaborate.” Leon said. “A diet low in sugar does help your teeth by lowering your risk of cavities, but all foods pose some risk of leading to tooth decay.
Therefore, you should brush at least twice daily to keep your mouth healthy.” Leon explained.
This detailed explanation helped his brother understand the importance of daily brushing.
Remediation for Clip A – 25 to 35 seconds
Audio
Jana is excited to meet with the local dressmaker in order to have her wedding gown custom made.
She is naturally very picky and has written down a list of specific details she wants included in the design of her dress.
She further elaborated on the details by offering a few examples.
Due to how specific Jana was, the dressmaker was a bit intimidated. The last thing she wanted was to ruin the special day by messing up the bridal gown.
She asked Jana to further elaborate on what she wants so that she is sure to get it right the first time.
Remediation for Clip B – 25 to 35 seconds
Audio
Amanda’s mom made her prom dress exactly as she wanted it. She had asked for a black dress with silver sequins.
When her mom finished sewing it, it was a perfect fit. She wrote to her sister who was away at college to tell her all about it.
In the letter she wanted to highlight how pretty the sequin design was. So she elaborated on that one specific detail.
Sometimes when you write, you may need to highlight a few specific details.
The best way to elaborate on a specific detail is to further explain it by telling a story, using an illustration, or giving more examples.
Amanda elaborated as much as she could by giving examples.
She was hoping her sister would get a good idea of what the dress …show more content…
Elaborate on a specific detail when you wish to bring that item to the forefront, similar to shining a spotlight on it.
Build on Introduction – 25 to 35 seconds
Cara was standing off stage during the school assembly. She was waiting for her high school teacher to introduce her music recital solo.
Karen is a gifted pianist, and for her school’s 100th year anniversary she decided to play the school alma mater as a solo.
Not too many people know about Cara’s love for playing the piano, so her teacher decided to write a brief introduction to get the audience interested.
When you introduce something, you should offer just enough information to peak everyone’s interest.
Too much information in an introduction tends to spoil the experience.
Build on Clip B – 25 to 35 seconds
Audio
Cindy wishes to keep a detailed journal of her journey to a Native American Reservation.
She is visiting the reservation for the summer. Her parents told her that she may have some distant relatives still living in the area.
This is all new to Cindy and she wants to keep an accurate record of the food, culture, and the …show more content…
Leon explained how his mouth would be healthier if he brushed daily, regardless of what he ate. However, his brother was still a bit confused.
“Let me elaborate.” Leon said. “A diet low in sugar does help your teeth by lowering your risk of cavities, but all foods pose some risk of leading to tooth decay.
Therefore, you should brush at least twice daily to keep your mouth healthy.” Leon explained.
This detailed explanation helped his brother understand the importance of daily brushing.
Remediation for Clip A – 25 to 35 seconds
Audio
Jana is excited to meet with the local dressmaker in order to have her wedding gown custom made.
She is naturally very picky and has written down a list of specific details she wants included in the design of her dress.
She further elaborated on the details by offering a few examples.
Due to how specific Jana was, the dressmaker was a bit intimidated. The last thing she wanted was to ruin the special day by messing up the bridal gown.
She asked Jana to further elaborate on what she wants so that she is sure to get it right the first time.
Remediation for Clip B – 25 to 35 seconds